punctuated
June 28, 2011
punctuate me
slash / me
underscore __ me
your lips
brackets
around my
(desire)
when I am with you I do not use apostrophes
and
I am still learning when to use commas
laying you down
on a bed
of c ns n nts
filling you
with a e i o u
that spill
down
your
blank
skin
a beautiful question mark
are you
whose curves
I (think) I know
the answer to
stunned by your trust
your body an !
arms thrown
behind your head
infinitives split
eyes dotted; dilated
the t
of my threshold
crossed
syntax stretched
two nouns
two names
two lives
one love
hyphenated
at the hips..
(entry for one shot wednesday week 52)
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Quite breath-taking…
a gorgeous write Pete.
Thanks Reneé!
Sensual and romantic + grammar = wonderful!
Why thank you sweetcheeks! 😉
Incredibly clever, gorgeous write…
Blushing.. 🙂
love it – exclamation point. bold letters.
specially the last paragraph – exclamation point. bold letters.
as of now, I am tempering my posts with sensuality because i am not sure if the folks over at OSP can take it. but I think I might submit one real sensual one for OSP…ha..ha…
Thanks Heaven! Glad you liked it.
Hmm Peter..rather interesting..really like the ending, it makes it!
Thanks KerryAnn! 🙂
Awesome job playing with grammar, very interesting writing tactic indeed. Enjoyed it!
Glad you enjoyed it Pat!
Wow! I love language and words and manipulating the two; and this piece exemplifies the craft. Wonderful!
Thanks for that comment Kim!
Very fun, creative poem! Well done.
Thanks Matt!
Damn, this is cool!
Thanks for stopping by!
Never again will I write punctuation without thinking of this poem. “Your body an !” Where does all this come from? Amazing! Witty, clever..and yet you have a little poignancy here as well. Thank you!
Thanks Jacqueline! *hugs*
*exhaling* Peter, this poem goes above & beyond your usual sensuousness in your other poems. I don’t know how you manage to keep building and building but you do. Completely awestruck… 🙂
I do my best! Glad you liked it so much! 🙂
Who knew language arts could be so sensuous!
Indeed! Thanks! 🙂
Oh, I do like how this is understated in its sensuality, which may not be the best way to say it. I just appreciate the passion you were able to infuse into such common things as punctuation and vowels. Really cool 🙂
Thanks Lori! *hugs*
This is cool !
Thank you!
Just wonderful this is word play it is absolute best!
“laying you down
on a bed
of c ns n nts
filling you
with a e i o u”
just loved the mental twist this series provides. Really enjoyed! ~ Rose
Thanks Rose! 🙂
I quite enjoy how you played with language.
Always thought grammar was sensuous, but didn’t know why, haaa. Now I see! You’ve captured it beautifully! So creative…nice work : )
Thank you Eva! *hugs* 🙂
Astounding work, Peter.
Thanks Melissa, I really appreciate you stopping by. 🙂
I read this through nine times before being able to contemplate commenting. It is exquisite! Simple, beautiful, romantic, intelligent and astounding.
You’re too kind. Thanks ever so much. 🙂
Loved the love in this poem. Great write!
Thank you for visiting!
So nerdy, so lovely– a sensuous blizzard of asterisks. You get my stamp of approval {awesomest 😉 use of playful grammar– hold on let me get out my magnifying glass}
(.)— PERIOD